Homework 33- Comments 4.

For Bianca:
I think that this being the last assignment for the unit it was supposed to have a lot of insights you obtained from the unit. I read your piece for those insights. I like how you started with a quote from your peer, an insight someone else had and built off it. I like how you talked about hospitals being factories for dying. You gave good sensory detail and that brought out the insight because it gave a clear idea to what you meant. I think you made another good insight relating it to schools, but they kind of contradict themselves. You are saying that a hospital is an industrialized atrocity because it is like a factory, and then you say that schools are factories too, but they provide good. So keep in mind being clear about what you mean and keep up the good work.
For Amber:
I don't exactly agree with everything that you said, but I think your post was very thought provoking. Overall it was a well-structured post. Every paragraph stuck to one idea. This made it very easy to follow what you were saying, and ultimately get the points you were making. I think one of the best points that you brought up was the one where you were talking about how people react to others dying. While I don't think that everyone is selfish, that more people are confused then selfish. But you make the point clearly, and it's thought provoking. A lot of the blog posts I've read make me think a little. But by asking so many questions this gets me thinking a lot. Good work.  
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From Bianca: 
Kevin,
Great post and wonderful thoughts! It's most certain that we are offered plenty of alternatives but, unfortunately most decide to ignore such opportunities. Moving to Canada wouldn't be a bad idea either. I don't have any major criticisms about your post. Of course, these are your culminated thoughts on this unit. Maybe one thing would be to be more aware of the first, second, and third person uses/perspectives.
Bianca
From Amber: 
I agreed with what you had to say. You were able to sum up to the reader about all the insights you have about illness and dying in our culture. I liked the last part the most; you are right, we are not required to follow the dominant social practices that much of our society tends to follow. There are a number of alternatives out there, but society has raised us in a way so that we are accustomed to the general social norms. I feel the same way after taking a part of this unit; the next time I get sick I won't have the same thoughts as I did in the past. I was able to connect myself with much of what you had to say throught this post. Keep this up, because it really got me thinking. For next time though, I would advise you to proof read; you made a couple of grammar mistakes. 
From Ryan (Brother, Younger): 
I think that the best lines from your homework were, "While there are nightmarish dominant social practices, there's no law requiring us to follow them. I think that the most important thing I learned in this unit is that there usually are alternatives to the dominant social practices most of us follow. And sometimes the alternatives are better then what everybody else thinks is the best option. It's up to us to act on it. " Because it gives a good conclusion for all the points you made before it. One thing you could have done better was write more about all the points you made. 
From Leon (Dad, Older):
I think that this is one of your least organized posts. Its a lot of information thats touched upon, but there's no real explanations. It is just hard to follow. But I also think that the ending of it was very strong, "And sometimes the alternatives are better then what everybody else thinks is the best option. It's up to us to act on it. " It shows that nothing is going to happen without you making it happen. That if you want something to happen one way, it's on you to make it that way.